Love for a dollar - Singin' in the Rain OT3 fluff for Katarik

[petra]

Love for a dollar (1167 words) by Petra
Chapters: 1/1
Fandom: Singin' in the Rain (1952)
Rating: General Audiences
Warnings: No Archive Warnings Apply
Relationships: Cosmo Brown/Don Lockwood/Kathy Selden
Characters: Don Lockwood, Cosmo Brown, Kathy Selden
Additional Tags: Gift Fic, Domestic Disputes, Domestic Fluff, Polyamory Negotiations, Happy Ending
Summary:

When R. F. recognizes Cosmo's genius and gives him a raise, he wants to pay rent. Don and Kathy have opinions about this.

I used to have a Singin' in the Rain icon of Don, Kathy, and Cosmo on the couch after "Good Morning" with the caption: "You kids keep each other warm while I get the KY." Then I didn't use it, and I went through a lean phase, so I don't have it anymore.

Some time later, I learned that KY, while it did exist, was used as surgical lubricant at the time, so I haven't remade it.

Instead of dancers from the 1950's, please accept these dancers in, if I had to guess, 1977. Using a Carrie Fisher icon is like using half a Debbie Reynolds icon anyway, right? Sure. And they are dancing.

(A note for people who don't have Carrie Fisher as a special interest: Debbie Reynolds, who was Kathy Selden in Singin' in the Rain, was her mother, who also lived next door to her. Ms. Fisher had a staircase in her home with the first stanza of Philip Larkin's "This Be The Verse" on it (sadly, the proof I have of this is from the Daily Fail, but I believe I learned about it from one of Ms. Fisher's autobiographical pieces.

It's a heck of a statement, when you live next door to your mom, to put this on your stairs:
"They fuck you up, your mum and dad.
They may not mean to, but they do.
They fill you with the faults they had
And add some extra, just for you.")

Thank you for coming to my TED Talk.

Comments

[buddleia]

Followed up on my comment at AO3 because I still have the icon! Yay! Worth logging back into DW after all this time \o/

[petra]

\o/ DARLINGS. Thank you for bringing the icon!

[watervole]

Sounds to me like a shared joke with your mum :)

[petra]

Very, very probably.

[watervole]

Would you be offended if I made a few editing suggestions?

I don't want to suggest anything unless it's welcome. (I spent a decade editing fanzines, way back when fanfic was all on paper)

[petra]

Oh, go for it! I didn't get this one beta-read, so I am up for constructive crit.

[watervole]

You're in Don's point of view, but you still use his name in most of the text. Using 'he' for much of the the story would probably fix it more firmly as being seen through his eyes.

You've a good ear for dialogue, wouldn't change anything there. :)

A bit of descriptive text helps to anchor the reader in the location, especially if you have scene changes.

I'd love to know more about Don's apartment - some descriptive text would really set the scene and let us know more about where they are living and what the rent is paying for. I'm sure you have a great mental picture of it. (I can see the sofa in my mind's eye, but how about the kitchen, for example? You clearly enjoy research - my kind of person - wouldn't you like to know more about where they live?)

You went to the trouble to check up on watches - why not give Don's watch a brand, or some distinctive feature?

He's a classy dresser - care to describe what he's wearing? Especially the pyjamas :)

Donald O'Conner is an all time favourite of mine!